Exercise: “Write in Third Person”
Isabel tromped through the hardware store looking for a heating filter. Rider’s current learning experiment was leaving goop and gore all over the woods. She wanted to examine the liquid without all the extra bits. But nothing she had at home worked. Ryan suggested an air filter and now she was lost in the mega store looking for a consumer product that she would so not be using as intended. She giggled at the thought of the ads that might play if it worked.
The Mind of Nox 
6 responses to “A Shifting Mess”
Looks like Roder is having a lot of fun with her goop. That coffee looks like a parrot face too.
I prefer 3rd person writing myself. If you read my 1st person you would see it still reads like the POV is down the street from my characters!
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I prefer first. But I can write in third, it’s really deep third though since a lot of what I write is thoughts inside their head.
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I always admire and envy writers who can get deep into characters. I never have the words for that it’s like a whole different vocabulary I’m missing. So, yes, I stay third omniscient (looking down from the ceiling) most of the time. And just head hop around until my tale it told.
I noticed from reading your pieces here, you have great voice in your work.
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To be fair I’ve been writing from the same pov for almost ten years. I can think like nox like he was me.
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That’s because Nox is real, just like Holly was for me. Living and breathing inside of you. Those moments when you connect and write with him and you hear his voice, talking to you. You feel him reading as you type. That’s the magic of writing isn’t it?
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Yeah it is.
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